Friday, November 24, 2017

One dark stormy nite at the zoo there was a boy coold Tom Rivis how has flop heri and a teleporting torch. lots of
frekis hats spiders.He is wearing a Blue jerze down to his bottom and red high tops that are shos and brown eyes and here armpits here chest. He also rides a glowing giraffe. And he is white .and he leeks art and all animals

Iksepr spiders. And protects  the zoo with all the animals.

4 comments:

  1. Kia Ora I am Carrie from Papakura Central School!
    I really enjoyed your writing especially the part when when it talks about the glowing giraffe. Something that I might fix about your writing is double checking all of your spelling and capital letters before publishing which also means re-reading. Another one is adding titles to your post. Other than that you blog is perfect, Keep up the great work!
    Thanks, Carrie. Check out my blog while you're at it - http://pcscarriet.blogspot.com/

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  2. Kia Ora my name is rollin i really like your story i enjoyed reading it but maybe check your spelling and adding more detail Thanks

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